Who on earth do you think you are? I get the single most disturbing Ellis-esque feel from this filth, you even delve into the music facet and your faked ‘deep’ sensibilities — urgh.
The world does not need another Bateman. Throw your carefully calculated deceit away and be honest with a woman.

I would like to know who the fuck reads the entire story and all they can comment on is the quality of the writing style?

It’s about the content of the story. What were you expecting? Shakespeare? fuck!

Roosh has probably fucked five times the amount of sluts any of you ‘anonymous’ cunts have!

At least he has the guts to write about his failures.

All the current stuff is informative and wise but not nearly as engaging and entertaining. Roosh-life stories, bring ‘em!

I really liked the way you communicated that “aha”moment when you realized that she’s not shy, she’s cold. It hit me almost as if I was there- one of those unpleasant but also freeing realizations of the truth that are quite shocking.

There is a grammar error in one sentence I think in the first page, a sentence that doesn’t have a subject or something.

I also really liked the reversal in the story. The move with you holding your arm out as you backed away questioning seemed so brilliant that I thought success was assured.

Other commenters mentioned “Women’s Studies” as foreshadowing, I see it as a eulogy for her femininity.

Not to criticize someone whose nerve and social skills are well past mine, but maybe finding out college major is a good, fast, cheap way of assessing a girl early and innocuously.

“How many dicks have you ridden?” might get a little blowback ( of the wrong kind) but finding out she was a major in women’s studies could have saved you a week of wasted effort. Now NURSING– pull out the stops.

Can’t feel. Game over, for real love as well as adventure sex.

Don’t worry Roosh. Every player has been there at some point. That’s just the nature of the game. You win some, and you lose some.

Nice number 40. Yeah I saw a few openings where the character could have turned things around.

-he should have invited her to go with him and GQ on the first night

-when he left the first message he should have let her know that HE would call HER back. That would have saved two days of waiting.

If I’m dealing with a difficult girl(those are the best ones by the way), I don’t ask I just take. You have to tell her where you want her to go and what you want her to do. He messed up by being too nice and “asking” for what he wanted.

most of all though, he should have never shown her that anything she did pissed him off, he let her get into his head from that get go. But I’m pretty sure that he knew that.

Good fiction though, reminds me of my afc days..

rapey

Been reading you for a few months now. Great stuff in general.

About this story: I think it’s really strong. Like Norman Mailer or Ernest Hemingway, your willingness to show your own “weak” spots makes it better. It’s easier to sympathize with the narrator cause he (you?) is so honest about exposing his own calculating and even needy sides.

The haters here either don’t get it cause they’re stupid or they hate on it cause they think you’re trying to brag about your soft spots. I think I get it… it’s just an attempt at brutal honesty. Of course it could be better edited or made more snappy or “deeper”, but that’s not the point. Any fiction (or nonfiction) could be made tighter, even that of the masters. Your story says: “This is the way my life is,” not “This is the way life should be.” The haters think you are saying the latter, and that’s why they ignorantly call you out on the same bullshit that you yourself point out. Pretty laughable on their part actually.

This shit will get you mad laid, incidentally, like Kundera. Chicks dig the vulnerable yet callous dick author. I’m sure I’m not telling you anything you don’t know

Keep it up, my brother. And keep posting in general, please.

Having sex before both people are in love with each other is merely vigorous physical exercise sans emotion. It is hollow, draining, and it does not uplift you. It drains you.

This is why alcohol, seduction and pick up are necessary for girls to drop their pants so boys (not men) can get laid. There is no genuine human connection here. You fantasized about love, but still it eludes you. Doesn’t it?

“No one can tell you you’re in love; you just know it. Through and through. Balls to bones.”

I know you’ve caught a glimpse of the other potential, the possibility for real connection, of real trust, love and intimacy. But you cannot find it outside of you. It comes from within.

You are still young, but you are intelligent and perhaps wise enough to learn this lesson. You seem like a romantic at heart, but you wall it off due to fear. Fear is the antithesis to love. If you truly want love, you have to let go of that fear.

Through your self training and discipline, you may have become more self-aware and aware of others. However, you have to become more enlightened before you are ready to really love.

Keep writing. Perhaps one day you will look back on this and see the lessons it contained.

47: i’m not too into making videos. it was a good experiment

HAHAHAHAHAH

Engaging story Roosh. Hope you had as much fun writing it as we did reading. Rich descriptions.

I think it’s time for a new video. Anything in the pipeline?

dude. how do you NOT fantasize about a girl before you bang her?

controlling one’s own thoughts is self-mastery of the highest caliber

Ding ding ding!

Nice story.

Remember, fantasizing about a girl before you fuck her is THE KISS OF DEATH.

The more you act like a boyfriend, the less likely you are to fuck her. The more you act like a one night stand guy, the more likely she is to want to become your girlfriend.

Fuck her first, and everything else falls into place.

p.s. All the haters and grammar dykes, go to hell.

good story. good writing.

“I can’t believe people are trying to criticize your writing!”

Stop lying to him. The story was poorly written and didn’t need to bet old as a “story.” It would’ve worked better as a simple essay with lots of “Is” and none of the wasted ambition.

shesaidno’s last blog post: Textbook hilarity.

so real.

I can’t believe people are trying to criticize your writing! That shit is genuine, they’re just agitated by the content, so they try to nit-pick the writing style. Don’t buy it.

Your writing style is fine. Real strong.

And the story is damn entertaining!

You took a scenario that could easily be banal, since it happens all the time… and you made it into something very engaging. Thought provoking. That is, if you’ve ever thought about sex.

I’ve met a hundred rachels in my day… oh man…